English FE1

Reviewer: Joshua Brown Paper by: Gesmine Akter     Gesmine's thesis can be argued from different perspectives, it is well written. She has an adequate amount of sources and quotes in her essay, and wrote an introduction coupled with two body paragraphs. The second body paragraph appears to be incomplete, due to an unfinished sentence bringing an end to the essay; this can be revised in the her next draft. Additionally, the grammar isn't flawless but the essay in it's majority is well-composed. The paragraphs and heading in her essay are appropriately aligned. 

Reviewer: Oscar Larsson Paper by: Davron Davron has a arguable thesis and it has a very big platform to talk about and how it is impacting his audience. He has a good first topic sentence and it relates to his theme and thesis. He has no visual analysis. He addresses all of his sources in his introduction. He has the correct amount of sources disregarding the visual analysis. He can definitely make 6 pages out of his thesis. He has the correct format. He uses the correct amount of sources and synthesis them very well. The only tip that i would give is to change “people” to “youth or students” etc. Otherwise this is a great draft.

Reviewer: Oscar Larsson Paper by: Joshua brown     There is a very arguable thesis and topic. The topic sentence is clear and it connects with the thesis very well. There is no visual analysis yet. There is one quote in the first paragraph, which does not make his paragraph a synthesis. He did not introduce the authors or his citations in the introduction. He has the correct format. I am unaware is he has two reading from the class but i'm sure he will find it. His sources are lacking but he has time to find them and use them in his paper. Otherwise i like how he used a very arguable theme and in class we talked about it alot giving him alot of pre work done and alot of background research already completed for him.

Paper 3 by Oscar Lars, Reviewed By Davron Ochilov       The thesis of this essay is arguable and it is open ended. The introduction is constructed very well  because he uses background information on his topic (memes) and explains what they are. The author of  this essay uses topic sentences that connects back to his essay of ‘Memes can be an effective way to teach  the young students today through social media.’ The author of this essay needs to work on his synthesis  within paragraphs and he needs to make sure to use at least 2 different sources. The essay is correctly  formatted although, it should be double checked for spelling and grammar mistakes.  Overall, this draft is a good start to a research paper but it could use some work.